Another Week, Another Draft

Another Week, Another Draft

39º and an intermittent drizzle, no sun to speak of

Last night before bed, I took account of the fact that it was Thursday and I had yet to draft a poem for this week. I had a little talking to with myself, saying, “self, tomorrow you will draft a poem before you do anything else.” Voila!

Today’s drafting notes:
One of my current obsessions is saints and their relics; however, rather than studying the existing ones, I’ve been creating my own in poems. So far I have “The Winter Saint,” “The Stone Saint,” and “The Once-Winged Saint.” I also have lots of poems that mention relics or reliquaries. For example, “The Mortician’s Wife” in Copper Nickel 12. A few weeks ago, I used our library’s ILL department to order some books as inspiration, completely going by titles alone. Wednesday, I received Relics & Reliquaries by Jeffrey Vallance. I flipped through and it is filled with wonderful color photographs. Strangely wonderful, it is about contemporary relics as much as ancient religious ones. Here’s a sample from the table of contents: Childhood Relics, Pop Culture Relics, Richard M. Nixon Relics, Vatican Relics, Favulous Vegas Relics, Lutheran Relics, … you get the idea.

This morning, I cleared my desk of distractions, set my iTunes to random on my classical music collection, cleared the screen, pushed the keyboard aside, and took up my journal & pen. I opened Vallance’s book to the TofC, and on the opposite page is an etching of a saint. My eye was drawn to the bare feet, beautifully rendered. Only after I’d taken in these feet did I glance at the caption. Turns out it’s an etching of the author in traditional saint-like pose, dressed in vaguely biblical robes, flowing locks of hair, light emanating in a halo of lines around the head, hands offering up two reliquaries, feet bare. Awesome. And then the first line struck…the feet of the fallen saint crack and splinter…

Somehow as I began to write about what I thought would become “The Fallen Saint” I was also thinking about the yew tree. I think I saw something on another blog recently about yew trees in poetry. I didn’t read the blog but thought of Sylvia Plath’s poem, “The Moon and the Yew Tree.” While the Plath poem is nowhere in my draft (or so I think), I did steal the yew tree.

Here is where research intersected with today’s draft. I hit the internet to find out more about yew trees. I had to make my saint European, and I included the poisonous berries and the typical birds that eat these seeds, thrushes and waxwings. Then I had to find out about the call of thrushes and waxwings. Note to self: if you play a recording of birdsong while trying to draft, both cats will leap onto the desk and stare raptly at the computer looking for their prey.

All of this wove together and became “The Starving Saint” (no longer fallen through several revisions).

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Shout Out

29º and a bit past sunrise, clouds out the south window, blue sky out the west

A giant shout out to the poets I met at Hendrix College yesterday afternoon/evening. Many thanks to Hope Coulter and the Murphy Foundation for making my visit possible. (The Murphy house is stunning!) More than thanks to Taylor, Michael, Matt, Julia, Lily, Becca, Joseph, & Tim for sharing your drafts with a stranger and listening with so much attention to my comments. I will be looking for your names alongside mine in the journals very soon! The whole event was a complete delight from arrival to departure.

To celebrate, I’ve created a cento from the pieces we workshopped last night.

Wrapping Boys Inside Birds: A Cento

My capabilities lie flat across my chest,
truncated, only an S-Curve hinting at a heroic pose.
I wanted to find my own uncertain fingers in your fragments.
Your essence in the air,
golden brilliance shimmering
down the middle,
producing only smoke and sorrow songs.
………………………………You could say
I died like the rain.

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What I’m Reading:  Sensational Spectacular

What I’m Reading: Sensational Spectacular

25º and thick strips of clouds, sun sifting through

As some of you may remember, I won a copy of Nate Pritts’ first book, Sensational Spectacular, in a Goodreads giveaway. I was unfamiliar with Pritts’ work, but with the chance of a free copy, I was willing to throw my name in the hat. I must also admit that I was curious after seeing the promotions for his new book from Cooper Dillon on Facebook. So that’s how marketing works! Little did I know there would be 500 or so other names in that hat and only a handful of copies to give away. Woo Hoo.

I’ve spent the last week or so reading this densely packed adventure. The book occurs in three parts: 1) Secret Origins, 2) Big Crisis, and 3) The Brave & The Bold. Parts 1 and 3 are composed of two short poems per page concerning the speaker and a group of friends, largely identified by a certain color (Red, Blue, Green) unique to each. Each of these small poems is titled with a colon before the first word of the title and after the last word in the title, providing a frame. In the table of contents, the individual small poems are not listed, so these titles are really intended as section breaks in a long poem called “Secret Origins” and another called “The Brave & The Bold.” The poems in the middle section are titled normally and are almost entirely about the speaker, minus his friends.

I mentioned that Pritts’ poems are slightly outside my comfort zone. They feel very youthful to me, and I do not mean that as a slight in any way. There is humor here, alongside longing and angst, and a definite sense of the conversational, everyday language spoken in plainspeak, but arranged with a whimsy. There is a fascination for hammers & tools, rockets & robots, and all things outer space. As I read, I felt like I was being allowed to overhear the intimate daily thoughts of a man not entirely grounded in the sludge & trudge of this workaday life. It grew on me.

Perhaps the sign of a poet’s success is this struggle I feel to write about the poems. They stand for themselves. So, here is the ending of one of the short poems from “Secret Origins,” “:Bowled Over:,” in which the speaker explains how he and his friends “enjoy competitive games” like bowling and bird watching.

…………………………………………………My friend

in blue tries to see only blue birds, turning a blind eye
on birds of any other color. His bird watching totals

are staggeringly low. My friend in red counts
anything he sees in the sky as a bird: airplanes,

dandelion pollen, clouds.

And here’s one of my favorites in its entirety from the middle section “Big Crisis.” Notice the subtle use of sounds, although often askew from traditional placements. You have to read it out loud. (The lines are double spaced in the original.)

Requiem for the End of Time!

Assume there’s someone else

pulling my strings, my mouth

opening to say the one thing

that will bring you back to me

but uttering nonsense instead.

Covered with cloud, I’m shaking

as my stupidity grows to silly

proportions. Yesterday morning

I saw the hooded man with the axe, yes,

I was led onto the stage & told to sing

my last. I inhaled & what I inhaled

turned me into a robot, my limbs

clunky & hollow, my chest filled

with gears & pistons where

breathing & love used to be.

I have a glowing faith

that eventually I will leave this all in the past.

I love the way that last line extends longer than the rest, bludgeoning us with that feeling of wanting to move past what has hurt us. I remember studying last lines in a Form & Theory class with Miller Williams and this change in length being one of the closures presented. Pritts uses it quite effectively here.

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Sensational Spectacular
Nate Pritts
Blaze VOX, 2007

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Prompting

31º and ice-melting sun, dripping water music

On Tuesday, I’m traveling down I-40 to visit Hendrix College and lead a Murphy Foundation ShopTalk poetry workshop for eight students. I’m honored to have been asked and delighted to attend. Interacting with beginning writers is one of my favorite things to do. In preparation, I typed up a list of some of my favorite writing exercises. Here’s what I came up with.

**Many of these ideas were stolen from other poets or created in collaboration with Angie Macri and Tara Bray.

1. Random generator: Take a text you love and start listing all the “good” words you can find, strong nouns, verbs, and adjectives. Jump around the pages. This is called a Word Bank. Try to get at least 50 words, but not more than 70. Number the list (I just mark every 5th word with its number). Go to random.org and use the random number generator. Generate two numbers in a row and write out the corresponding words from your list. Do this until you get a dozen or so pairs (it’s okay if some of the words get used more than once). Once you have a good selection of pairings, lines should begin to suggest themselves based on the random words. Draft away.

2.Take any line of a poem or story that you love, change two – four words in the line (depending on length) and make it the first line of a new draft.

3. Browse a good dictionary (preferably the OED) and find 5 words you hadn’t known before. Copy out the words and their definitions in your journal. Draft a poem that includes two of the new words.

4. Pick a shape and let that shape influence the form of the poem. For instance, if you pick a pentagon, then draft a poem of 5 stanzas of 5 lines each. The first line of the first stanza could be repeated (with slight variation) as the second line of the second stanza, the third of the third, and so on, allowing for slight variations in the repetition.

5. The fun-house mirror exercise. Draft a poem (no requirements) or choose a poem you’ve already drafted. Now, draft a reflection of that poem as seen in a fun-house mirror; in other words, distort the form and the content of the first draft. The second poem should be, loosely, related to the first in theme. You may repeat a few phrases but the second poem should stand on its own. For example, if the original is made of tercets with long lines, try writing a reflection that has stanzas of six lines alternated with tercets. Try for short lines.

6. Pick a body part. Write a poem not only inspired by or about that body part, but in a form suggested by it.

7. Great writer’s block breaker. Read one poem each from three of your favorite writers and generate a word bank of 50 – 70 words (see #1). Then, using the words from your Word Bank, complete this Mad Lib style poem. The goal is to make it as wildly imaginative as possible. Do not insert a word that would be expected.
[Name of a city] [adjective], [adjective]
Your streets are made of [noun] and [noun]
Your language sounds like [verb-ing] [noun]
At night you dream of [adjective] [noun] and [noun]
[Repeat city name], your people [verb] at [time of day]
You are jealous of [name another city, country, ocean, or geographic landmark]
for its willingness to [verb]
[Repeat city name] [adjective], [adjective]
Now take off from there. Do you see a line or two that could become the beginning of a poem? You can change the [Name of a city] to anything really: [Inanimate object], [Animal], [Object in the sky], etc. and adapt the lines from there. The point is to get your brain playing with language.

8. Mad Lib from another text. Pick a text that is not poetry. This could be a textbook, a newspaper article, a piece of junk mail. Copy out three to five sentences from the text. Now cut out all the nouns, adjectives, verbs, and adverbs. You should be left with a scaffold of articles, prepositions, conjunctions, and etc. Fill in the blanks from one of your Word Banks or with words of your own. Then REVISE your new lines into a poem, adding on to whatever the original text generated. (This exercise should get you focused on syntax.)

Enjoy if you will; ignore if you won’t.

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In the Mail: Folded into your Midwestern Thunderstorm

28º and the ice thickens

How does the US postal slogan go? Neither rain nor sleet nor… Our intrepid mail carrier did in fact deliver our mail amid the sleet and ice bullets. And in that delivery was a great surprise. The week got a bit busy and I forgot that I’d ordered Kristen Orser’s chapbook Folded into Your Midwestern Thunderstorm from Greying Ghost Press. Honestly, I’m not sure on which blog I saw this mentioned, but the title was too much for me to bear. I had to own it. (Now, after weeks of buying books at will and charging my plane fare for AWP, I have a moratorium on buying ANYTHING besides the necessities for the next month!)

But back to the “surprise.” I carefully opened the mailer and was puzzled when I saw that there were lots of little bits of things included with the book. I tipped the book out into my hand. Spilling forth were: an 8 1/2 x 11″ numbered pamphlet by Sasha Fletcher (an unknown poet to me until now), an unused postcard with all the words in Cyrillic, a page torn from a comic book written about George Stephenson inventor of the steam engine locomotive, a tiny print of the Bascule Bridge in Corpus Christi, a photo illustration of a potter turning a bowl, and a small black & white photograph of what appears to be a customs boarding crossing between the US and Mexico. And then there was the book! The cover extends about a quarter of an inch beyond the pages and is cut from a piece of blank, orchestral sheet music. There is a beautiful pink stamp of an owl that I simply can’t describe. No words on the cover. Opening the cover reveals fuchsia endpapers. All in all the production is superb.

I’ve only glanced at the first poem (as I feel a headache coming on from too many hours at the computer), but I cannot wait to read this!

Flipping to the back in search of author info, instead I find that this is a numbered production. I’m the proud owner of #15/99. Woo Hoo! The colophon is witty and worth the read. Finally, stacking all my goodies to the side, I went to the website and discovered this:
All of our books are handmade and in most cases, every aspect of production is done in-house. This includes the processes of printing, binding, and shipping. Each cover is hand stamped or pressed. And all of our mailorders are stuffed full with either old photos, fragments of old maps and books, comic scraps, and other ephemera. Greying Ghost seeks to reassure the reading public that printed matter won’t vanish.

What a wonderful undertaking. I’m going to take a closer look at their catalog when the moratorium on shopping lifts!

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Drafting Progress

32º and solid cloud cover, a layer of crunchy sleet, ice gathering on leaves and branches, conditions to deteriorate as more moisture arrives with falling temps

Another snow day for the husband and me, although I don’t travel to campus on Fridays because of online teaching, so it’s not a real snow day for me. It’s actually ice we’re about to get, which is nothing to mess with down here…to many hills, too few salt trucks.

Everything has been moving at half speed for me this morning, perhaps because of the lack of sun and the sinking temps. Therefore, this post is a bit later than normal. I’m not sure how it happened but at the end of week 3 of the semester, I find that I’ve developed a pattern for writing: Mondays: read others’ works and post about them, Wednesday catch up on others’ blogs and maybe some more reading (school-related obligations build), Friday (a gathering breath and a step back from school) draft my poem attempt of the week. I wonder if the patter will hold.

Today, I have three rejection letters sitting on the desk waiting to be recorded; however, I did draft, for which I’m always thankful. I did not use any kind of prompt per se. I did begin by reading from someone else: Nate Pritts, Sensational Spectacular, which I’ll be posting on soon. Pritts is just a bit outside my comfort zone, but that’s turned out to be a good thing. I’ve been reading the book more slowly, delving in again this morning as I shifted gears into “word mode.” Pritts uses the colon a lot and I’ve been studying how he uses it to his best advantage. One of his poems, “Duel on the Island,” begins, “Hidden: a meticulous list,” and after I read that line, it stuck in my head. I continued to read a few more poems before my draft began to form in my head, starting with, you guessed it, “Hidden:…” I scribbled out some lines of pure image, whatever came to me. I fumbled around with it for a bit. After twenty minutes of scrawling lines and then scratching half of them out I realized that the line should begin, “Recovered: …” Then a scenario built itself in my head and a speaker to go with it. And now there is a poem of sorts beginning. Today’s poem is titled “Notes from the Burial Site.” (I almost never begin a poem with a title in mind. This one only arrived after I had that first group of lines and a scenario.)

For those keeping score, January was a huge success. Four weeks, four poems! They are:
“Having been Entrusted with the Safekeeping”
“Pilgrimage”
“For Beaufort’s Distant, Landlocked Daughter”
“Notes from the Burial Site”

I’m also pleased with the way this writing schedule allows me to revise at will. I believe that I’ve tinkered with the older poems at least twice a week so far. One consequence of this is that the poems are almost always floating around in my head and therefore the revising goes more easily, I think. Fewer stops, starts, and stutters. The poems become more organic, perhaps.

In the face of rejection, the only step available is to revise, revise, revise, and write on.

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Wednesday Comes Early This Week

46º and cloud cover

Tomorrow, I have one of those rare conflicts with my writing schedule. As frequent readers know, I have reorganized my life to make writing a priority, which involves dedicating 3 hours each Monday, Wednesday, and Friday mornings to thinking, reading, and writing. Now that I’ve made and kept that schedule, I don’t like to have it disrupted. Alas, there are some things that are out of our control.

In any case, I wanted to post this now because it includes such good news. Friend, editor, and poet, Justin Evans, has just announced the acceptance of his first book! Stop by his blog, One Man’s Trash, and help join in the celebration. If you haven’t read his online journal, Hobble Creek Review, what are you waiting for?

Also, new poet-blogger friend, January O’Neil has a great column up over a ReadWritePoem on making sure your poetry finds an audience. Definitely worth the read.

I’ll be back in full swing on Friday.

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What I’m Reading:  In the Voice of a Minor Saint

What I’m Reading: In the Voice of a Minor Saint

37º & glitters of sun, a wind building towards gusting

I’ve been following Sarah J. Sloat’s blog, the rain in my purse, for over a year and always delight when I come across one of her poems in a journal. I bought her chapbook, In the Voice of a Minor Saint, after I read the title poem online somewhere, I think. I’ve also been working on a series of poems about made-up, forgotten saints, so the title intrigued me as well. I’ve now re-read the book for the third time and am still delighted.

An aside before delving into the poems: This was my first book from Tilt Press, and I’d like to commend them on the quality of the chapbook. The cover art is amazing and in four-color printing. The paper is quality stock, heavy enough to withstand my dog-earring behaviors and my endless annotations. And, the inclusion of the endpapers of chocolate brown give the whole thing a polished look.

To the poems: Sloat’s subject matter focuses on the everyday in such a natural way that I fall into the poems quite easily. These are both poems of consolation for living in a painful world and poems of defiance against letting the painful parts win. These are poems that call attention to our “epidemic impoverishment” and our “nerves ripped to bits” (“3 Deep”). Yet, they also call attention to this world “wallowing / off in the wheat of long siestas” (“Humidity”). The same poem also asks the reader to “Console / yourself: at least the trees / put up their parasols… .”

Sloat is a master of sound and syntax, two properties I consider essential for lasting poetry. Perhaps because I’ve been introducing my beginning creative writing students to alliteration and assonance, these two craft issues stood out the most as I re-read in order to discover what made the poems sing so. As I read, I was also impressed with the precision of the line breaks and the deft shifting from enjambment to end-stopped lines when the poem called for it. Also, her last lines are masterful.

To sample from my three favorite poems of the collection, here is the opening stanza of “Grassland.”

When I could not get with child
I swallowed the egg of the meadowlark
who eats the daylight
the mother of untangled grasses.
A long drop, the egg bore its root
in my foot, it stitched me
together with grain.

Another favorite is “Ghazal with Heavenly Bodies,” which includes such couplets as these

Look at me crooked. Mistake me for Eve. If looks
deceive, who knows which mask our maker wears tonight?

Yet again, love drops anchor where lust dug its moat.
On the roof, angels play musical chairs tonight.

My signature moves like loops and lightning. Letter
posted, I’ll sleep the sleep of millionaires tonight.

And finally, I can’t help but include the entirety of the title poem.

In the Voice of a Minor Saint

I came at a wee hour
into my miniature existence.

I keep my hair close cropped
that my face might fit in lockets.

My heart is small, like a love
of buttons or black pepper.

On approach, I notice how
objects grow and contours blear.

That’s what comes of nearness.
I have an ear for the specific,

as St. Apollonia minds the teeth,
and Magnus of Fussen, hailstones.

I dwarf gloom with my cachet sign:
one good hand conceals

my one good eye,
halving all disaster.

That “ear for the specific” and the way the poems have of “halving all disaster” makes me sure I’ll be re-reading this book in the future. Definitely worth the price of admission!

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In the Voice of a Minor Saint
Sarah J. Sloat
Tilt Press, 2009

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Quake Poem

55º and lovely, warming sun

Thanks to Josh Robbins for sending me this poem.

Earthquake such great stretches of dreamscape such lines of all too familiar lines staved in caved in so the filthy wake resounds with the notion of the pair of us? What of the pair of us? Pretty much the tale of the family surviving disaster: “In the ancient serpent stink of our blood we got clear of the valley; the village loosed stone lions roaring at our heels.” Sleep, troubled sleep, the troubled waking of the heart yours on top of mine chipped dishes stacked in the pitching sink of noontides. What then of words? Grinding them together to summon up the void as night insects grind their crazed wing cases? Caught caught caught unequivocally caught caught caught caught head over heels into the abyss for no good reason except for the sudden faint steadfastness of our own true names, our own amazing names that had hitherto been consigned to a realm of forgetfulness itself quite tumbledown. Aimé Césaire (Translated, from the French, by Paul Muldoon.) from The New Yorker, January 25, 2010
Doctors Without Borders
Red Cross
Oxfam America

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Mighty Links

50º and 80% cloudy…a rumor of severe weather on the western horizon

Here are three mighty links from today’s blog reading.

dancing girl press is having an awesome winter sale. Chapbooks normally $7, buy 5 for $20, shipping included! Chapbooks really are the bees knees in terms of bang for your buck (how’s that for cliches?)! I picked three titles and asked the press to pick two more. Not sure if that will work, but I hope so. I picked: The Sad Epistles by Emma Bolden, Flood Year by Sara Tracey, and Orange Girl by Simone Muench. (I really do have to stop buying books now! Must save to pay for AWP. Just bought plane ticket and credit card gained a few pounds on that purchase!)

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Over at Little Epic Against Oblivion, Josh Robbins has a link to a WONDERFUL video/poem that I plan on showing all of my classes, composition and creative writing. Check it out. Poem by Taylor Mali; video by Ronnie Bruce.

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This one is over a week old, but I just found it today via The Word Cage: Mike Young, with the aid of Elisa Gabbert, posted on Moves in Contemporary Poetry over at HTMLGIANT. It’s a wonderful list of current trends in poetry.

Enjoy!

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